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The Myth of Second Chances (1/3) [Claude/Bennet]
Title: The Myth of Second Chances, Part 1 - Of Small Apocalypses
Rating: R
Pairing: Claude/Bennet
Spoilers: Up to 1.20 - 'Five Years Gone'
Recipient/Prompts: [info]triciasama/banter about the past with the "rookie element" included; invisibility is love; the line "And it exploded."
Word Count: 5,155
Summary: Claude Rains runs, and the world burns.
Notes: Written for the [info]brave_new_slash fic exchange. Many thanks to [info]runningondreams for the wonderful beta and [info]indyhat for the support and morally grey invisible cheerleading!





The Myth of Second Chances










Part 1

Of Small Apocalypses



The rain hits him, absurdly precise, like someone up
there has a bloody score to settle with him. Not out of the realm of possibility, Claude figures. It's not as if he's the most charming and likeable specimen of man to grace the earth, after all.

"Claude Rains, you are surrounded. Come out immediately with your hands up-" the megaphone-amplified voice comes to an awkward halt – "come out
visible with your hands up."

A sharp bark of laughter escapes his throat, bitter with irony.

And when the laugh crosses into howl territory, reality sinks in fully. No illusions, no apologies. Just the truth.

The rain feels sharp, slicing into his skin unrepentantly, mingling with sweat and blood – something
cleansing about it too, if you're into that sort of thing. He can't say he is; whole concept is bit much on the spiritual side for his indelicate taste.

But it's not just a myth that when you're about to die, everything feels more
real than it ever has.

And he doesn't know if it's a blessing or a curse, or some mocking combination of the two – but it's not like he's got the time to figure that out, now does he?

He stops laughing when he runs out of air, but the rain keeps pouring.






When Claude was eight years old (and no, he wasn't actually
Claude back then, why do you ask?) he broke his leg climbing a strangely alluring tree in the middle of sodding nowhere. And he was alone there for hours, waiting for someone to come. Nobody did.

It was hot and dry, and when night fell he thought that nobody would ever find him. That he'd just disappear.






And he thought that it would be far more fun to die in the rain.



---



Claude Rains runs, and the world burns.

And he'd stop to laugh at this cliché-ridden, epic mess of a soap opera, if it wasn't all so painfully, surreally real.

When he sees the mushroom cloud, painted like a frozen, grotesque comic in the distance, he forgets to breathe, and he can't look away.

He should feel something – anything – but he just stands there, transparent to the world, staring numbly at a torn horizon.

It starts to rain, just a slow dribble at first, soon washing over the world like somebody has turned on a global fire sprinkler.

The world burns, and Claude Rains doesn't stop running.



---



The real kicker about the end of the world is that it's not really the end at all, now is it? It just likes to pretend it is. But the world, in all its supposedly 'ended' glory, is still there, burnt and scarred and wholesomely pathetic – a broken toy still clinging to the illusion of survival, still trying to keep going as if nothing happened, expecting everyone to do the same; like some deranged, deformed Energizer Bunny. No goal or future – just extended battery-life.

The apocalypse – not all it's cracked up to be.

Claude drowns lousy metaphors in piss-tasting beer – a lethally effective mixture that helps murder risky lines of thought, that strangles feelings, leaving him comfortably hollowed out and blank.

It's funny really, how people are so desperate to cling to any promise of normality, to anyone who's willing to hold them tight and tell them that everything will be alright, sweetie. It was just a bad dream. Go back to sleep.

It doesn't even have to be a very good liar.

Even in this shoddy, dusty, pitiful excuse for a bar, people are praying to the television – empty, hypnotized shells searching for electronic salvation. Peter's (all dead now – another thought that he chokes the life out of with a well-placed swig) firm-jawed, slick wanker of a brother, recently elected congressman, talks about strength and unity and hope; hypocritical bullshit wrapped in a neat, polished-to-shine package, spoon-fed across the nation and worldwide.

Strength. Unity. Hope.

Each word more illusory, more insulting than the last.

And it's the last one that gets him.

Claude snorts, shoves a greasy bar patron out of the way, and slams the door on his way out.



---



Claude runs. Doesn't spend more than one night in one place, fuelled by old ghosts and phantom paranoia.

It doesn’t matter. He doesn't matter.

There are days when even he forgets he exists.



---



He hitches an invisible ride with a fuzzy-looking man who vaguely resembles a washed-out, overweight cocker spaniel.

'Leaving on a Jet Plane' plays on the radio, and the man stops the car at the side of the road, hands shaking as he reaches for his bag, taking out an old handgun.

Claude's reflexes are dulled by inertia, giving him no chance to respond as the cocker spaniel man puts the gun in his mouth and, at an amateurish and crooked angle, still manages to successfully splatter his brains all over the windshield.

When Claude goes through his stuff (never been the most sensitive type, and the nuclear holocaust didn't help him much on that front), he finds a newspaper clipping depicting a young cocker spaniel lady, smiling awkwardly at the camera, blissfully unaware of the article title.

America Remembers.

'Leaving on a Jet Plane' is playing on the radio.

And Claude is tired of running.



---



New York doesn't smell of strength or unity or hope. Nor does it smell of death or destruction or loss.

Nothing poetic like that.

It smells of sewers in mid-repair, of sweat and dust.

Claude moves through the streets, some too empty, others too crowded. There's a faint hysteria hovering in the air, a neurotic static electricity that bounces off people, seeps into the walls of wrecked buildings and lingers.

Little shrines to the dead decorate the street corners, now vacant.

The shadows of evaporated people are painted crudely over sidewalks.

He's a ghost walking a half-dead city, and isn't that just bloody fitting.

The world's sense of dramatic irony has left the Deveaux building mostly intact. The old rooftop is covered in white dust, sprinkled in rubble, providing a twisted artistic view of the broken city.

The tacky cherub statues are still there, guarding the purposeless circle (he'd hunt down the architect personally if he didn't think kitsch karma would catch up with the poor sod eventually), and not for the first time he gets the distinct impression that the angelic little bastards are laughing at him, mocking the world.

Cute, that. Really cute.

He paces back and forth, hand at the back of his neck, struggling against the countless flashes of memory tied to this place, plaguing it like a silent, bitter melody.

A few steps towards the ledge and there's Bennet, wearing his awkwardly stoic rookie shell, looking down at his newest 'assignment' like she's a tiny alien. A tiny alien he would die to protect.

Don't get too close.

Maybe he was the one who should've listened to that infinitely useful piece of advice. But he was never great at following orders, anyway.

Step behind the pigeon coop and Peter's making his ridiculous 'determined' face, like a puppy with digestion problem, but still managing to snap the stick in half as if it were a toothpick. And he remembers lighting up from the inside for the first time in years. Pathetic, how strong an effect human contact that didn't reek of use and abuse (which isn't to say Peter and he didn't have their… moments) had on him. How hope – a quaint, uninvited sense of purpose – tingled at his fingertips no matter how many times he'd told it to scoot – or beat it with a stick.

A swift turn and then the taser dart is penetrating his skin – shocking and a raw blast from the past – shattering his memory piggy bank in all its repressed glory. And this is what happens when you give in to hope, kids – it comes back to taser you in the arse.

Claude stops in his tracks as he suddenly realizes –

The pigeons are gone.

It's just an insignificant minor detail – he didn't really expect them to stay. And what are a few useless birds in light of a million lives erased in a single moment, anyway? But finally the foundations of frosted numbness holding him together – dead to the world, dead to himself – shake, and all the guilt and the anger and the blinding pain rise up in a fucking tsunami, tearing out of his lungs, clawing and breaking and strangling him until he can barely see, until his throat burns.

He slams his fist against the building wall hard enough to crack bone.

Blood on his knuckles and white pain to numb all other sensation, if only for a moment – and he slides down to the floor, trying to find the will to breathe.

Claude shuts his eyes and releases an empty laugh that echoes against broken walls.

There's no place like home.



---



He wakes up in cold sweat, an intrusive sound grazing against a battered consciousness. It's late in the evening – night even, and he's not alone.

Measured footsteps, careful yet drawn with quiet, resolute assurance.

He stays still – fucking statuesque – but his heart is beating so fast it can stop any moment, blood overheating in his veins until everything's at boiling point, flooding his vision in violent reds.

Then again, he doesn't have to look to know who it is. Eight years together and seven apart will do that to you.

Christmas cards were in short supply this year, so it's nice to know the Company hasn't forgotten him after all.

Rookie's back on the hunt.

And Claude may be an animal, but he won't be trapped like one.

It's far too late for hide-and-seek now. It's a whole different game, with a different set of rules. He gets to his feet, tails the dark silhouette without making a sound, barely even breathing. If there's one thing his illustrious career in Primatech Paper had taught him, is that there's a perilously thin line between hunter and hunted. A balance that hangs on the thread of a single misstep.

It's a balance his old partner is well-familiar with, and a few moments later Bennet stops abruptly, turns at just the right angle – bloody disturbing how efficient the son of a bitch has gotten – but the deafening thumping of blood in Claude's ears wins out, and he launches himself at his former partner, tackling him down to the dusty roof surface. He drowns Bennet's groan of surprise with a punch as an old familiar beast stirs at the back of his mind, burning through his chest, bloodthirsty and vengeful, unnervingly quiet.

In that moment, he's nothing but instinct and pain. A second blow to the jaw stuns Bennet enough for Claude to find the gun holstered under Bennet's jacket, to pull it out and press it against his chin.

Finger brushes the trigger.

Breathe in. Breathe out.

For a second, the roof is engulfed in dead silence.

"Claude."

The upside of invisibility is that he doesn't have to talk back, doesn't have to acknowledge.

The downside is that the bastard can't look him in the eye so he can kill him properly.

It would be so easy. To let his finger slip and put an end to this sorry game, to wipe his past into a clean, sterile slate in one instant.

He shoves the gun harder against bone – how about a fuckin' reaction, mate? You think I'm playin' here? – finding perverted pleasure in the wince it gets, the sped-up breath, the first genuine flash of fear in the Bennet's eyes; not quite the Company-manufactured robot he likes to pretend he is.

None of it reaches Bennet's voice. "Are you going to kill me invisible?"

"You think you deserve better, friend?"

Only hitched panting passes between them, and when Bennet finally speaks, his voice barely rises over the wind.

"No."

Funny. It's the only answer he would have accepted.

He hasn't been real for months, and making an exception now, and for the son of a bitch who betrayed him, who efficiently and obediently ripped him apart as soon as his masters barked the order - well, there aren't really any words to describe the idiotic hypocrisy of that, are there?

And idiotic hypocrite he apparently is – or more likely, a sentimental moron, which is even worse - because he barely even thinks about it, just shimmers in; feels his spine tingle at the sensation - alien in its familiarity - at the sudden exposure.

He may be the one with the gun, but he feels naked. And Bennet's clear, penetrating gaze makes it much worse.

"Thank you," Bennet says after a bout of silence. "I appreciate it."

Claude gives an ugly snort. Good to know that little Noah Bennet hasn't forgotten his sodding manners. Rookie is nothing if not polite.

And Bennet is still looking, straining his neck against the pressure of metal, breathing hard but still looking right into him.

This was a mistake. He should've stayed invisible. Should've let the gun go off like it was bloody supposed to.

Bit too late for that now.

Now he's supposed to think and consider and remember - and he can't even tell whose heart is beating out of control, whose breathing sounds like an asthmatic dog in mid-seizure. Without the wall they're not company man and special, not hunter and hunted. Just old friends with too much blood between them.

So yeah, it would be easy to shoot. So easy it's downright impossible.

He keeps the gun pressed hard for a few more moments – let the bastard sweat – before tossing it a few feet away; could keep it to himself, but unfortunately he's allergic to firearms.

Now what?

Protective layer of invisibility gone, and there's nothing to shield him from the world. He's suddenly aware of sensation and it's like a resurrected limb, or a straight razor sliding on oversensitive skin. The clear night air is freezing; the moon is brighter - more blinding than looking straight into the sun.

Bennet's expression changes – a short-lived moment of relief, and then something else. Bennet moves – reaches out with the kind of assured hesitation only he has the capacity for, and fingers stroke his cheek – Claude doesn't – can't - react, feather-light touch igniting a tension that threatens to set him on fire.

Bodies pressed together, mouths too close and craving an intimacy that shouldn't even exist. Nothing should exist between them, not even vacuum, but his nerves are on end, an ache going through his bones and muscles, drenched in separation and desperation and need. Lips all but brushing against each other.

Oh, that's just bloody beautiful.

Seven odd years on the run are bound to fuck you up pretty damn royally. And the sad and maddening thing is that seven can't erase eight. Only highlight them.

But then the trance breaks and he bolts away from Bennet, instantly sliding back into the land of the see-through. Cowardice – now there's familiar ground.

Bennet stays still in his horizontal position, looks around. Then gets to his feet, brushing the dust off his clothes in a manner so damn calm that Claude struggles with the impulse to knock him down again, just to watch the wanker's mask slip. But he also knows him well enough to read past the composed shell, see the awkward apprehension he's so keen on hiding. "Claude? Are you alright?"

He doesn't dignify that with a response.

"I just want to talk," only a mild waver disrupts impeccably reasonable words.

"Not much in the mood for a chat," he spits out in reply, building more distance, more space between them. "Sorry."

"I'm not with the Company anymore." It shouldn't come as a surprise, considering he's not wearing the signature suit - and the gun isn't Company-issued either - but it still hits him hard. Hard enough that his mind goes blank, short-circuited at the implications and possibilities. "Not for a few months now."

"Don't care who you're with, long as you're not anywhere near me."

He's lying, but not really, and it's not like miscommunication is the greatest of their problems. He doesn't have the patience or mental serenity to try and maneuver through the web of foreign emotion that Bennet's reappearance has so effortlessly triggered.

"This is bigger than us," Bennet stresses, and there's the zealous annoyance that marked him as Company boy scout through and through, resurfacing stronger than ever. The big picture. The greater fucking good. "We need to-"

A flash of enraged movement and Claude's hands are entangled in Bennet's coat, face twisted in a snarl.

"There's no 'we'. And only thing you need to do, rookie, is get the hell off my roof, before I throw you off. Don't think I'll be quite this sentimental next time."

He shoves Bennet away and waits. For a stupid split second he hopes that Bennet stays anyway, that his stubborn, bullheaded streak wins this one – but Bennet just sighs, turns, and leaves without a word.

And then it's just him and the other ghosts.



---



The news is particularly charming this morning. Vice President Petrelli dramatically informs the world about a genetic mutation that allows people to develop special abilities, and weaves a fairy tale about a man named Sylar - the monster who annihilated New York.

Just like that, the Company is becoming a joke - a childish, nostalgic little dream.

And reality is swallowed by a much bigger nightmare.



---



His dreams reek of death. At least, the better ones do.

The nightmares are the ones that bring back hope. They're warm and soft and smell like family. They lie and tell him that someone cares, that he matters - and he almost believes it. There's a whisper tickling his ear, saying something reassuring, a hand touching his cheek and he wants to reach out -

And then he wakes up alone in debris, inhaling more dust than air.

He meets the end of the world anew each morning. It doesn't get any prettier.

He thinks about running away – Europe, Asia, the fucking North Pole even – but they're nothing but stray, lost daydreams. It doesn't matter anymore. He doesn't get much further than the roof these days.

His hand hurts. At first he thinks he can ignore it – just a soddin' hand, don't be a baby - but soon enough it starts feeling like somebody shoved a bloody firecracker under his skin.

Punching walls, while great fun for the whole family, apparently isn't the healthiest of activities.

Finding himself a doctor would be a good, logical decision, but that would mean letting the world see him, and he would rather die. Besides, seeking proper medical attention lacks the pastoral post-apocalyptic survival appeal.

He raids a pharmacy and a liquor store instead, and dulls the pain in a vicious haze.



---



The second time Bennet pays him a visit, Claude almost throws him off the roof.

Sadly, the emphasis is on the almost, not on the throwing. And much as he'd like to blame his damaged hand for the performance anxiety, it really comes down to the fact that Bennet would break permanently, and even though the bastard more than deserves it - that's something Claude just can't have.

He still pushes him in the vague direction of the ledge – it's the thought that counts, and it gives him some miniature degree of control over the situation. "I told you not to come back." Whatever threatening note he intends is lost underneath a hoarse and uneven voice. His rage feels hollow, mechanical. "Thought you were good at followin' orders."

"Actually," Bennet corrects, "you just said you wouldn't be quite so sentimental."

Claude snorts, finding a momentary comfort of familiarity in Bennet's anal-retentive observation of the day. "It's called readin' between the lines. Useful skill to have, actually, especially when death threats are involved."

He takes a few steps to side, and Bennet's gaze manages to follow his movement despite lack of visual aids.

"If you wanted to kill me, you would've done it by now." And it's simple statement of fact, not speculative in the least. He'd love to prove Bennet wrong – wrap his fingers around his neck and choke that calm, impassive air right out of him - but the painfully aggravating truth is that the son of a bitch is right.

He can't kill him. He can't even seem to hurt him right.

"Maybe I was just waitin' for an opportunity to make it more painful. Did you think of that?"

Bennet frowns, briefly looks away. But if Claude's rusted ability to read his old partner is still reliable, the gesture is less about discomfort and more about tactical regrouping of thoughts.

"It was never the same, after-" Bennet pauses, giving his first genuine stutter, "after you were gone." Oh, you pathetic little coward. An ugly sneer marks Claude's face, and rage finds a comfortable home again, settling in a cold burning somewhere between his hand and his chest. Bennet is oblivious, attempting a smile, "Quieter, for one."

Grinning darkly, Claude leans against the wall - standing upright is becoming a chore – shuts his eyes and clings to the childish notion that maybe if he pretends that Bennet doesn't exist, it will come true.

But Bennet, ignorant bastard that he is, just keeps on talking, and existing by extension. "Claude, I -" he takes a deep breath that turns into a throat-clearing cough, "I realize that you probably hate me right now, I understand that, but-"

A jolt of agonizing energy goes through him, and before he can even feel himself move, he's in Bennet's face, blood pumping to a frenzied beat.

"Oh, you understand, do you?"

Bennet's face goes carefully blank, shadowed by apprehension - beginning to construct an answer even now, because clearly there's no situation that's beyond Noah Bennet's precious control.

"You understand what it's like to choke on your own blood? Or to feel like you're just fadin' away with nothing to hold on to, and know that you'll just be conveniently forgotten by everyone you ever knew or cared about? And I bet you understand what it feels like to have your best friend stab you in the back, too - like you're just a dumb animal to be taken out the back and shot," his breath comes out in splatters and he focuses on the spikes of pain shooting through his arm, just lets the dull, twisted sensation guide him in a blind labyrinth of torn feelings - only stopping for a moment to take in Bennet's rapidly paling face, forcibly controlled breathing. To feel that he's getting a reaction that isn't calm and thought-out and fucking programmed.

"I trusted you. I thought you were better than them, but you just had to prove me wrong didn't you? Every bit the obedient little soldier they made you to be. Just followin' orders and collecting your biscuit. And now that arrangement isn't working out for you anymore, so you expect to kiss and make up, is that it?" He stops to collect a wild pant, to grab a handful of Bennet's shirt and spin him towards the broken landscape. "And that - you think that changes anything? That you just get to collect a get-out-of-shooting-your-partner-free card? That it earns you a clean slate?"

Bennet has the good sense to keep silent, at least, looking all but monochromic. A tremor shoots along Claude's skin and everything slows down. He releases his grip on Bennet's shirt, giving a stark grimace. "Just because everything else is fucked doesn’t mean we get to make nice. Don't know what your mum taught you mate, but that's not how the world works."

He steps back, makes a strangled noise under his breath, and he doesn't know if it's a laugh or a huff or something that lacks human definition.

"So no, I don't hate you, rookie," his rage settles into a low hum in his bloodstream, energy seeping out until everything becomes all muted and faded around the edges, until he forgets what the point of this whole rant was, and why he's even supposed to care. "I just wish I never knew you. Would've saved us both a lot of trouble."

Bennet is rooted in place like a bleeding statue, gaze firmly directed downwards. Like a misbehaving child who's been put in the corner. Incredible - just fucking incredible. He eventually draws a breath that makes Claude suspect he hadn't actually been breathing through the entire lecture, and when he speaks it's his slow, reasonable voice again, "You don't mean-"

Claude throws his last reserve of energy into a violent shove, one that almost reintroduces Bennet to the roof surface, though unfortunately he manages to regain balance at the last moment. "Get the hell away from me. Or is that too subtle for you to understand? Do you want me to draw you a nice little diagram?"

Bennet doesn't ask for a diagram, and has the decency to look wounded before walking away.

Claude pretends the roof doesn't feel emptier when he's gone.

He's gotten bloody good at pretending.



---



In the seven years he'd played dead, Claude had done his share of downright idiotic things - but getting piss drunk was never one of them. Survival instinct played too strong a part, memories of horror holding a constant terrifying promise.

Self-preservation only goes so far, though, and self-destruction is far more appealingly human.

He can barely see reality these days; stuck between dark shivers and the frozen spider-web of pain that's spread from his hand to his entire body. Drinking doesn't help much, and it isn't supposed to.

He sees faces.

There's little Claire-Bear with the smile that could melt planets and ignite supernovas on the edge of the universe, running towards him with her arms stretched out for a hug. Demanding elaborate magic tricks from 'uncle Cwaude', which was somehow the nicest thing anyone had ever called him.

Every person he's ever bagged and tagged, pleading him to help them understand - to tell them what being Special means, and he has to tell them it means living in fear and hiding, being hunted and running until there's nothing left of you but a thin human shell. If you're lucky, that is.

And then there's Peter, lost expression somehow punctuated by that stupid hair; stubborn hope alight in brown eyes, mingled in frantic desperation; so bright and so close, looking to him for answers, for help.

A shining, burning gallery of his cowardice.

Masochism is nothing innovative, but it works.



---



"You know," Bennet's carefully leveled words ride at the very edge of his awareness, slipping in between devastating tides of hot and cold, of pain that's either too distant or too close, "soon you'll have to wrap yourself in bandages to be seen. I can bring toilet paper, if you'd like."

He moves his lips, maybe to talk, maybe to laugh, maybe to scream - but nothing comes out, so he doesn't bother – licks the sweat off them instead; it's more bitter than it should be, like seawater and blood.

Maybe he'll just go away on his own.

"Claude?"

Bennet's really too persistent a sod for his own good. A few inquisitive steps closer, and Bennet's infuriatingly clear voice interrupts his beauty rest yet again. "Are you there?"

He doesn't even attempt speaking this time, instead tries to make as little noise as possible, be the perfect invisible man - but Bennet somehow gets nearer without asking for directions, closer and closer until his foot bumps into Claude's knee, triggering an onslaught of intrusive sensation and his jaw snaps shut at the sudden contact, a hiss shuddering through his teeth.

"You're hurt," Bennet determinedly states the obvious, kneeling beside him and bringing his hand to Claude's forehead.

"Don't touch me," he grits out, lamely attempting to push the invasive bastard away, only to encounter a white paralyzing shock of pain.

It's got to be a truly miserable state he's in, if he can't even punch bloody Noah Bennet in the face.

Bennet concludes his uninvited inspection and stands up. "Hold on. I'll be right back."

Claude hopes he won't, that he'd be decent enough to just leave him be; let him fade away. But since when has Bennet been anywhere near decent?

The cold air bites into his flesh, digs in, cruel and unforgiving. He longs to disconnect entirely, to go away and never come back, but he can't. Not yet.

Footsteps again, but now with an accompanying echo, and when they close in he sees two pairs of feet. "Still a stubborn son of a bitch, huh?" It's a different voice, so familiar - impossibly familiar, as a matter of fact - but infected by a dark tinge of weary bitterness.

He groans and forces himself to look up. Shadows and bleak moonlight make way for an ugly scar splitting a pretty face; eyes that are aching to be hollow, touched by too much death.

Claude must be trapped in one of his vividly lucid nightmares again, because Peter Petrelli is alive.

He almost reaches out, needing to feel - but Peter has drawn back already, turning to Bennet.

"He needs a doctor. A real doctor. We don't have much time."

Bennet spares him a glance, nods. "Let's go, then."

He tries to fight them - last thing he needs is help from Bennet and a bloody empathic zombie - but he's about as effective as a lethargic squid - a winning combination of dizziness and nausea sends him over the edge, and he ends up finding grim satisfaction in throwing up on Bennet's shoes.

There's a mild sigh, and the world spins one last time before turning a distinctive shade of black.



---



The megaphone is having a break, and Claude takes a moment to
breathe. You never realize just how attached to oxygen you really are until you're about to run out.

He tastes rain water trapped against his tongue, and it's better than the best champagne he's ever had. Then again, he's always been of the opinion that champagne is pretentious-wanker exclusive.

But you can hardly expect rain to taste like beer.

Some asshole takes up the megaphone again, and time runs preciously short.






When Claude was fifteen years old, he turned invisible.

Ever had one of those dreams when you were a kid, that you're all alone in the world? Everybody just went poof. You can do anything you like, anything at all – the whole world is your playground.

But there's no one else.

And it's the greatest fun you can ever have, until you get tired of it and realize you don't want to play anymore. But you're trapped in it. And you're completely terrified.






Claude never woke up.



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[info]triciasama
2007-11-03 08:29 pm UTC (link)
ldsfksdfasdasdasjkh...

First of all, as I have indicated there, I am incoherent. You wrote for my prommpts! And a supremely fantastic piece of writing for my prompts as well. Shoot me dead right here.

It's haunting, aching and real. The hardness is balanced out by the glimmers of vulnerability and the beginning and the end about the past just solidifies the whole overall feeling about it.

And then it's just him and the other ghosts.

Invisibility and ghosts and drifting and disappering. It just sums it up in that lovely line.

A shining, burning gallery of his cowardice.

Masochism is nothing innovative, but it works.


I believe you've got Claude spot on here. He's not afraid of cowardice, even though he resents it. And the pigeons leaving scene hit me hard. It's the finality of the thought and the visual.

I'd say more but I'll probably write an essay on it. It's an amazing piece of work. Thank you!

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 11:54 am UTC (link)
I'm really happy you like this and especially happy I managed to induce keyboard mashing! ;)

I'm still feeling guilty for not being able to fit all prompts right in, but the damn thing completely exploded on me (so maybe the exploded line can fit subtextually? :P).

I haven't written in 5YG before (well, not distinctly in 5YG), so I'm glad I could get the atmosphere right (I think it has far more potential than what the show depicted, actually) - post-apocalyptic is really a lot of fun...

I've also never gotten very deep into Claude POV and I figured this was my chance - he's so damn fascinating and unpredictable and messy, it's really been awesome writing him here.

Sorry for answering so late - was a bit ded most of the week and I'm trying to resurrect now (though uni isn't helping), and maybe get back to writing part 2...

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 12:04 pm UTC (link)
Oh, and thanks for the feedback! I'm so totally lacking in brainz today. XD

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[info]indyhat
2007-11-03 08:32 pm UTC (link)
I love this fic so hard ... and I can't wait for the rest of it!

Without the wall they're not company man and special, not hunter and hunted. Just old friends with too much blood between them.

This was lovely. Perfect encapsulation of their situation.

rage finds a comfortable home again, settling in a cold burning somewhere between his hand and his chest.

Oh ... *wants to hug poor Claude*

Wonderful, masochistic fic. ME LUVZ.

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 12:00 pm UTC (link)
Oh damn, I think it's time to start answering teh feedbackz. xP And I hope to get back to writing today too, if uni stuffs don't eat me instead.

I'm really glad you liked that line, because that part has been eating away at me and I needed something encompassing there, I guess. And I might've had some Blade Runner of my mind in that scene... xD

I don't think Claude is very huggable atm! He might bite...

Thanks muchly! :D MAH MASOCHIZM: LET ME SADIZT U IT.

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[info]aunt_zelda
2007-11-03 09:59 pm UTC (link)
Gah ...
Woah ...
I NEVER read enough Claude/Bennet! This is AMAZING and WONDERFUL and I WISH I HAS TIME TO LEAVE A VERY LONG COMMENT!
KENSAI APPROVAL!
*regrettably must run off to catch up on other slashes*

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 12:01 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much! Yay Kensei approval!

Good luck with catching up on the slashes...

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[info]rhea_carlysse
2007-11-03 10:22 pm UTC (link)
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I love, love, LOVE this fic, just so you know. Keep writing, but don't stress yourself too much *hands out a cookie*

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 12:03 pm UTC (link)
Your keyboard mashing has weird symbols on it. @_@

Thank you! *_* And yeah I really have to start writing it again... *whistles, grabs cookie, escapes.* >_>

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(Anonymous)
2007-11-04 05:53 am UTC (link)
This was lovely, absolutely lovely: evocative, with dazzling insights and a truly beautiful narrative spareness. Elegant is the word I want, I think. I've read a lot of Claude--well, as much as there is out there--and the voice is hard to do; vicious snarling at the gates of an infinite abyss of loneliness, and you've done it. Honestly, this was so good that it could stand alone as a mood piece. It is as close to perfect as I have ever found, and there's only one thing I would change (and I offer this criticism with the utmost most respect): you overuse italics. Of course, it's a manner of opinion--taste, really--and I can hear what you're attempting to do with them in terms of rhythm and emphasis, but the words themselves are arranged well enough that I think you could cut two thirds of them and maintain the feel. You've done so well that this sort of cue to the reader isn't really necessary; Claude's voice is as clear as day (or as clear as Claude himself; sorry, couldn't resist) in my head, both his Manchester accent and his spitting rage fading into bitter weariness, and the constant italics--though they do add a sense of Old English poetry: Claude as the antihero of the Battle of Maldon!--are at least redundant, and possibly even intrusive. But that said, I adored this, and cannot wait until there's more. I shall now go read everything else you've ever written.
The end.

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 12:17 pm UTC (link)
Wow, thank you so much for the lovely comment! It's very different from the feedback I normally get, and very refreshing.

I'd agree that Claude's voice is tricky (as is Bennet's, actually - they're among the more challenging characters, which is possibly a part of why I enjoy them so much), but it is very rewarding, and it's very nice to write somebody unpredictable, because you might be surprised at the outcome yourself.

I try to make each part fairly stand-alone-ish (at least with some solid beginning-middle-end structure), but I've written it with a bigger picture in mind, and right now I'm slowly working on part 2.

Yeah, I actually was a bit worried about overusing italics, so thank you for pointing it out! I'll try to cut back in the next parts - these damn things are addictive.

Again, thank you for the wonderful feedback! I really appreciate it.

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[info]yuna_chan10
2007-11-04 05:56 am UTC (link)
Wow, to be honest, this is my first fic of this length for anything Heroes related. I have to say this was so very well written. Bloody hell this was good! I reached the end and thought, 'wait... no!!! Where's the rest!!!???'

I know what it's like writing sometimes. Take your time and don't try too hard. I'm sure it'll be worth the wait. ^_^

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 12:34 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! Well, this is gonna get a hell lot bigger, really. ;) I'm very happy you like it so far. I'm working on the rest! Had a bit of a hiatus, but hopefully I'll be able to produce part 2 soon enough...

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[info]shionthekid
2007-11-04 06:13 am UTC (link)
Wow, just wow. My heart goes out to Claude and his well-earned bitterness now compounded with new Peter-related guilt - his voice rings so true to his character. The little areas of humor within the fic, especially:

It's got to be a truly miserable state he's in, if he can't even punch bloody Noah Bennet in the face

made me smile, while Claude's desperation, his almost-conscious desire to fade literally into nothing, broke me heart.

Looking forward to part two :)

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 12:48 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much! I'm really happy to have captured Claude's voice - I don't think I've ever written him quite so intimately, and it's a tricky characterization, but I enjoy writing him tremendously, even though the bastard likes being difficult.

And you just can't have Claude without the humor, no matter how bleak everything is. Hee, I'm really glad you enjoyed that line - think it was the first thing I wrote in that scene.

Hopefully I'll be able to get part 2 done soon.

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[info]entangled_now
2007-11-04 08:58 am UTC (link)
This is fantastic, I have to say that I loved the beginning. I adore those little snatches of how the public would need to be flexible when dealing with people with varying abilities, and it was funny!

I also love the way you've written/are writing Claude's headspace that cynical desperation that's grubby and hard and sort of hopeless. The fact that Bennet keeps turning up and Claude really does miss him when he's gone, for all that he says he doesn't. But there's humour between all the lines, even in the dark bits, which I really like.

And now I want to read part 2!

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:03 pm UTC (link)
Thank you muchly! Yeah, the public being rather clueless about that sort of thing is fun to mess about with, and maybe I'll get a chance to do a bit more of that in later parts...

Claude's headspace is a helluva place to be in, and even though this is third person and I've written him in first before, this still feels the closest I've ever gotten to him. It's messy ground to tread, and I love writing him. Bennet is very persistent, which is part of the reason why Claude/Bennet still has some hope even with all that bridge shooting biz. And I can't live without humor, otherwise everything would just be terribly depressing!

I really need to work on part 2 (I'm about 4K into it now, and I reckon it won't agree to go under 10!), but I haz some uni stuffs to do first. *hopeless cries*

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[info]veetvoojagig
2007-11-04 11:29 am UTC (link)
Dude, that is awesome.

I've been fighting a fever for a few days, and last night my concentration was completely shot. You should have heard me whining about not being able to read The Pants's new story. *laughs* Yay for sleep and reading finally.

I can't wait for the rest.

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:04 pm UTC (link)
Thanks you so much! :D You feeling better now?

You'll probably have to wait a bit, because I was on hiatus all week, so right now I'm only about 4K into part 2, and it needs a lot more.

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[info]jungian_shadow
2007-11-04 01:30 pm UTC (link)
Hooray for actually remembering to sign out of [info]mr_morallygrey for once >_>

Guh. Just... guh. I am quite incoherent by the beauty of this. Seriously, so, so amazing. And it's obvious I actually can't think of anything useful to say because my brain is just like "Wow! *fzzt-pop*"

I'm in love with your characterizations, the tone, the pace, everything. (And now I'm going to have to make an effort not to subconsciously burrow, because I'm in so much awe of this XD) I can't wait for the second and third parts!

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:29 pm UTC (link)
Heh, I'm totally still spying on you guys! ;)

Thank you so much! I'm so happy that you enjoyed this, especially since I'm enjoying your RP endeavors so very much. And I'm sure I must have borrowed something subconsciously from you, so I'd be honored if you borrowed from me, really. That's what fanon is for. :P

I'm hoping to get in shape to write more soon! Got 4K of part 2, but I'm pretty sure it'll end up at least twice that.

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[info]ricestorm
2007-11-04 05:04 pm UTC (link)
only stopping for a moment to take in Bennet's rapidly paling face, forcibly controlled breathing. To feel that he's getting a reaction that isn't calm and thought-out and fucking programmed.

I love this line. Claude can always tell when Bennet's being insincere (which is...almost all of the time), but the fact that he needs to see his partner truthfully reacting (along with his inability to kill the poor bastard) is just a wonderful example of how horribly symbiotic they are. Just like with his invisibility; beautiful comparison there with the nightmares.

I can't wait to read the rest!

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:37 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

Claude being a lie detector for Bennet is a wonderful thing, because it sets the relationship apart from just about everything else Bennet-related. They connect on a deeper level, even if there are gaps and tears and a hell lot of pain there, and it occasionally strips Bennet of control and Claude of cynicism. It's pretty much why I love the pairing so much - they can tear each other done very effectively.

I've been on a bit of break from writing and fandom stuffs this week, but hopefully I'll be able to finish part 2 soon!

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[info]runningondreams
2007-11-04 07:50 pm UTC (link)
*mwah* I've read this about six times now and every time the same lines give me chills. *shiver* Absolutely hypnotizing, this is terrific. I love the darkness you've shown in Claude and the way you weave it into the world around him as well. Beautiful.

And of course, now I look at my own efforts and have to remind myself that pre-shooting Claude's personality is significantly different from post-shooting Claude's. You're making me want to write the future!fic, damnnit!

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:43 pm UTC (link)
Thank you muchly! It's very flattering to hear it's worth re-reading, and that's it's chill-inducing. :) I haven't written Claude this dark before, so in a way this fic is a very big experiment for me, and I'm really loving it so far. I don't think part 2 will be quite this dark... need to build Claude back up a bit, and start hurting Bennet instead. :P

Wouldn't say it's significantly different, it's just filtered through a lot of bitterness and other such nice stuff - but he's still pretty much the same underneath, way I see it.

How's your writing going?

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[info]mystery_sock
2007-11-05 02:32 am UTC (link)
This is amazingly good like a very good thing. Like a great thing, even. That last line broke me... oh yes, this is what I'm talking about. I wish I had better words to describe it, but my brain is on hiatus. (Or is it on strike?... ) Oh there's more. Thank Jebus, there's more.

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:51 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it and that the last line had breakage-value. And I believe my brain is on prolonged hiatus as well, though it's tingling slightly, so it might be coming back. Yes, there's more! :D But I still need to finish it... *pokes Word helplessly*

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[info]longhairedlady
2007-11-05 03:27 pm UTC (link)
I am absoilutly in love with this. There's more, right?

I love how you leaven the angst with homour in this, it somehow makes the sad bits all the more sad, you know? Like this paragraph, just hilarious yet true

Peter's making his ridiculous 'determined' face, like a puppy with digestion problem, but still managing to snap the stick in half as if it were a toothpick. And he remembers lighting up from the inside for the first time in years. Pathetic, how strong an effect human contact that didn't reek of use and abuse (which isn't to say Peter and he didn't have their… moments) had on him. How hope – a quaint, uninvited sense of purpose – tingled at his fingertips no matter how many times he'd told it to scoot – or beat it with a stick.

The story is brilliant too, Claude, just being so Claude hiding away and remembering everything and thinking that a doctor didn't have wuite the right post apacalypic feel. Awesome.

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:53 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! And yeah, there's definitely more. :)

I love working humor into the the angst, because it makes it a bit more real-feeling, and because you need some light in the dark (and the other way around).

Really happy that you liked this!

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[info]furius
2007-11-06 12:12 am UTC (link)
♥ Claude and Bennet and your characterization, oh the humor and the hardbitten edge to this...

There will be more, right?

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:54 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much! Can't have a humor-deprived Claude-POV, now can you? Even in post-apocalyptic settings.

There will certainly be more!

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[info]liritarofrohan
2007-11-06 06:22 am UTC (link)
Hell yes. Coherency not here. And stuff.

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:55 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! And yeah, coherency not here either.

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[info]tju_tju_tju_tju
2007-11-07 02:27 am UTC (link)
I am still going "nviorbnovbnweriobv" when I read this. XD

Seriously, your writing prowess cannot be expressed in mere words (especially the mere words of someone as lowly as I), so instead I shall worship you for the next few weeks or so.

*worshipping commeneces*

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-11-10 01:58 pm UTC (link)
That sounds like a mouthful. XD

Thanks so much! I'm really, really happy you like this. But please to be stopping your worshiping, because the morally grey gods might grow angry and strike me down with vengeance and possibly turn me mrly mrl 4 srs. :(

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[info]airspaniel
2007-12-23 04:17 pm UTC (link)
I can't believe I forgot to comment the first time I read this! 0_o

It's all right, it's more than worth a second (and third and fourth, etc.) read.

I got so used to reading your comedy that this blindsided me a little. Seeing your skill and evocativeness turned toward angst is a powerful thing. The entire rhythm of the piece feels fractured, like running, which works so incredibly well with the themes and the characters. And your Bennet/Claude is second to none. Absolutely stunning.

I can't wait for future installments!

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[info]fantasticpants
2007-12-23 07:04 pm UTC (link)
Hey, don't worry about it! xD I only pimped because I thought you hadn't read it.

I was getting a bit too comfortable with crack(Bennet-in-a-dress is so damn hard to resist...), but much as I love humor and pretty much can't live without it, I'm an angst h0r just as much. Mostly I just like to make a morally grey mess of humor and angst to confuse the enemy.

I was going for a breathless feel, in the fractured scenes in the beginning at least, and I'm really glad it comes across that way. It's probably the deepest I've plunged into Claude's POV, and it's been quite the trip.

I'm really glad you're enjoying it! Hope to be able to produce more soon.

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